Is this a senryu?

Risotto nero
last Friday at Bondi Beach
poo still black today

2 responses to “Is this a senryu?

  1. Apparently should be all in present tense – suggest a re-write. On human nature – fair enough. Similar experience recently with blackened prawns – only the word was not the Italian “nero” – rather the Japanese word for the same: “kuro”! Recall fright some years ago after eating baked baby beetroot – as you might imagine!

  2. Thanks Jim. I thought you’d be able to answer the question. If I was to do a rewrite it would be of the title – change to ‘This is not a senryu’. I do know what you mean about teh baby beetroot.

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